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I close my eyes
but nothing helps
light breaks focus
darkness confounds
and eats the answers
Trying to get my feelings out in different ways, sorry for the spam.
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compression of expression flowing in a singular theme and perfectly wrapped ... wonderful imagery and associative meanings and sibilant echoes.

light breaks focus
darkness confounds
and eats the answers


You manage to collect a distillation of that sense of confusion and questioning suspicions and distractions that apply to several situations ... ADD, shaking trust in a fragmenting love affair, migraine effects, the jitter and dance of closed eye kisses. All within the confines of a structured 4-4-4-5 single stanza frame-work.

I can find so need of suggestion of 'improvement' to this work (as though i'm pompous enough to do so in the first place); so no constructive criticism to offer, and though i left the first two lines off from your work in my quotation that is simply to avoid quoting the entire piece and to magnify the build to your culmination.

The duality of your artistry, visual and written amazes me. You manage to collect such moving bits of your life and present them so beautifully. Thank you for posting your portfolio here; i've loved every bit of it.

Mandy
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Cloud-Factory Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014
As you say 'Dang' Beeeeeethhhhhh this is the most beautiful imagery of words. :love::heart: 
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Andaelentari Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
:blush: :blush:
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bear48 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Professional
deeply moving 
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Andaelentari Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
thank you :heart:
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Saikia Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Even sadness has it's beauty. The answers always come in due time.
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Andaelentari Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I sure hope so :blackrose:
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SnowInHades Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm... you should create this in image form I think :idea:
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Andaelentari Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
hm an interesting idea :confused:
I just might, I have enough negative energy left over xD
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x-bossie-boots-x Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It is not spam this is so well written and emotion is felt i know the feeling well :)
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Andaelentari Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
thank you :)
I'm glad I have understanding watchers :hug:
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